Wednesday, February 27, 2013

It didn't used to rain like this in Feburary.

Going out after the rain has stopped

Rows of diminishing raindrops
hanging on park benches, fences,

leaves, occasionally falling
       one    (two&one)

falling into

rippling the reflection
of retiring storm clouds

         leaving town;
a young school girl
holds out her hand

palm open to the sky:
all she catches is sunshine.

She steps out remembering
the umbrella in her bag.



Work has taken quite a bit of my energy lately. I've decided I'll just ride with the ups and downs.


Brian Miller said...

nice....really wonderful on the imagery after the rain and nice transition as well to the girl...glad she got the sun...but still remembered her umbrella...i love the rain...

Unknown said...

really nice imagery in this one Raven. Really like the counting aspect early on, as well as the way the format shifted with falling, very nicely done and effective. And I agree with Brian, really like the imagery of the rain, as well as the short, but very effective final line. Very nice. Thanks

Ravenblack said...

Thanks guys. :)

dsnake1 said...

yeah, it didn't used to rain like this in February. :(

Brian Miller said...

hey you...hope you are well...smiles
thanks for dropping in today...

Ravenblack said...

Hey Brian! :) I haven't been posting for a while but I'm well.