Saturday, January 28, 2012

Fragment

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Ripples

Ripples form on the surface of a pond.
Below, fishes kiss the surface; above,
a turtle dives, a pond-skater skates.



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3 comments:

Fred Rutherford said...

Really like this Raven. It's only three lines but it seems to have a lot to tell me. I see this as a moment captured, or a piece showing the surface value of things, where the skater skating is just one part of the scene, there is an above and a below as well. A frozen pond was a great choice for a setting. Nice job. Thanks

Ravenblack said...

Thanks for your feedback, Fred.

I had it longer, but fundamentally it was just these three lines that mattered.

dsnake1 said...

so much said for what's happening on, above and below the water, in 3 lines. :)