From within,from behindunshackled front gates and fireproof front door,a baby's cries breakthe hourglass of dawn;a woman stands facing the doorshe stands in pajamasbare foot on the welcome mat
as if waitingfor herselfstaring at the crackson the concrete floorto bethe smell of dew, a touchof lingering night breezeleaving before the suntakes to the skies fullycalmthe footstepsof neighborsas they prepare breakfastsounds like a cat fightor somethingor just the demands of a newborn baby
to mother.
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No, I have no idea what it takes to take care of a newborn, or how to raise children as they make demands even before they know words. Happy Mother's Day to mothers celebrating this weekend.
15 comments:
love all the little textures in this...and i think you do honor mothers in it...it is not easy raising kids at all...but it is def a joy....as if waiting for herself...that is a key line for me as it is easy to get lost in raising kids too...
Thanks for the visit and comment, Brian. I saw this woman standing outside her door and just standing there, as if she needed a break.
I love this one. You paint a very descriptive scene, incorporating the senses and some reflection. Quite a lot packed in here, very well done Raven. Thanks
You would never know that you were unfamiliar with new borns. This is a perfect capture.
Thanks Fred and Raven.
Just worked on what I saw. :)
Being a mother is the hardest job in the world. It's 24 hours a day, 7 days a week and no time off for good behaviour. I would imagine she needed a break.
Lovely, gentle piece Raven. :)
though you may have "no idea what it takes to take care of a newborn", i think this piece is an honest tribute to all mothers. the job is mundane, even frustrating at times, but it is a job where much attention and care is given into it. i loved your keen observations of life in our heartlands. what you described can be any ordinary mother who just want to have a breather, or to be alone for a while.
Thanks for the visit and positive feedback, dsnake and Daydreamer.
Glad you guys like.
a beautiful poem in honor of the mothers...not an easy job at times..remember those days when i stood somewhere, waiting for myself...thanks for this..
Hello Claudia, really appreciate your comment. :)
This swept me away, and I loved the ending!
Breaking the hourglass of dawn -- splendid image in an overall splendid poem.
xoxo
Thanks Jannie! :)
Boy ... you really cover everything here and most poetically! Cool.
My oldest daughter is getting ready to step into motherhood...excitement mixed with uncertainty. I love your observation here...very poignant I think... Well done.
Thanks. :)
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