Saturday, May 12, 2012

What it takes to take care of baby

From within,
from behind

unshackled front gates and fireproof front door,

a baby's cries break
the hourglass of dawn;

a woman stands facing the door
             she stands in pajamas
             bare foot on the welcome mat
       as if waiting
  for herself

                                staring at the cracks
                                on the concrete floor

to be

                     the smell of dew, a touch
                     of lingering night breeze
                     leaving before the sun 
                     takes to the skies fully


                    the footsteps
                    of neighbors
                    as they prepare breakfast

                                          sounds like a cat fight
                                        or something

              or just the demands of a newborn baby
          to mother.

No, I have no idea what it takes to take care of a newborn, or how to raise children as they make demands even before they know words. Happy Mother's Day to mothers celebrating this weekend.


Brian Miller said...

love all the little textures in this...and i think you do honor mothers in is not easy raising kids at all...but it is def a if waiting for herself...that is a key line for me as it is easy to get lost in raising kids too...

Ravenblack said...

Thanks for the visit and comment, Brian. I saw this woman standing outside her door and just standing there, as if she needed a break.

Unknown said...

I love this one. You paint a very descriptive scene, incorporating the senses and some reflection. Quite a lot packed in here, very well done Raven. Thanks

Liz Rice-Sosne said...

You would never know that you were unfamiliar with new borns. This is a perfect capture.

Ravenblack said...

Thanks Fred and Raven.

Just worked on what I saw. :)

Daydreamertoo said...

Being a mother is the hardest job in the world. It's 24 hours a day, 7 days a week and no time off for good behaviour. I would imagine she needed a break.
Lovely, gentle piece Raven. :)

dsnake1 said...

though you may have "no idea what it takes to take care of a newborn", i think this piece is an honest tribute to all mothers. the job is mundane, even frustrating at times, but it is a job where much attention and care is given into it. i loved your keen observations of life in our heartlands. what you described can be any ordinary mother who just want to have a breather, or to be alone for a while.

Ravenblack said...

Thanks for the visit and positive feedback, dsnake and Daydreamer.

Glad you guys like.

Claudia said...

a beautiful poem in honor of the mothers...not an easy job at times..remember those days when i stood somewhere, waiting for myself...thanks for this..

Ravenblack said...

Hello Claudia, really appreciate your comment. :)

Jannie Funster said...

This swept me away, and I loved the ending!

Breaking the hourglass of dawn -- splendid image in an overall splendid poem.


Ravenblack said...

Thanks Jannie! :)

Liz Rice-Sosne said...

Boy ... you really cover everything here and most poetically! Cool.

Bodhirose said...

My oldest daughter is getting ready to step into motherhood...excitement mixed with uncertainty. I love your observation here...very poignant I think... Well done.

Ravenblack said...

Thanks. :)