Saturday, February 25, 2012

A totem of sorts


Stone Bird

on the sand

filled playground
blue mosaic
tiles covered

pelican profile
with a single



and swings
the widest grin

rain or shine
I remember

into that smile

into a daydream.


*A playground "Stone Bird"


Unknown said...

was so pleased to see you on the blog-roll, showing a new poem. The title is great, totems are used differently depending on the culture of the holder. In native american tribal traditions a totem often represents identity of place, person or thing. In magic, a totem can be used to capture identity, as well as use in rites…so much more, anyhow, a really cool title, fits well in different ways. Love the way this piece is written, flowing easily, almost as if each line inspired the creation of the next. Relic/on the sand//filled playground/ultramarine… lovely progression. and the ending was perfect. Anyway, a good read, thanks.

Ravenblack said...

Thanks Fred, appreciated your reading. :)

Never really appreciated this playground object until I realise the last one (the one the picture) might not be standing there for much longer. I think I will forever associated this blue stone bird with the joy of visiting a playground. :) So, I guess I thought it might qualify as a totem.

Claudia said...

i much like the idea of climbing into the smile...very visual and tactile...and i'm always up for daydreams...smiles

Daydreamertoo said...

Awww... Happy memories never fade. You've captured yours in this lovely piece.

Ravenblack said...

Thank you, Claudia and Daydreamer. :)

Pat Hatt said...

Wonderful to bring back happy memories and just get lost in them at times. Very nice verse.

Ravenblack said...

Thank you, Pat.

Victoria said...

My favorite line, definitely, "climbing into the smile." Very good details that allowed me to be there with you.

Raven said...

Definitly a totem!

Ravenblack said...

Victoria and Raven: Glad you both like. :)

dsnake1 said...

great poem! i really like that "climbing into that smile". :)

a whole generation grew up in those playgrounds. i remembered there were stone dragons too, but all these gave way to plastic & rubber structures. (much safer)

Ravenblack said...

I think sandy playgrounds are thing of the past all together. I do agree rubber or foam grounds are cleaner. Really too bad though. :)