tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post1336675590763263494..comments2023-05-27T20:10:09.708+08:00Comments on Conversations the Other Day: Down that roadRavenblackhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07408808375869234480noreply@blogger.comBlogger39125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-29280855439924760792011-08-06T13:48:55.474+08:002011-08-06T13:48:55.474+08:00Thanks for the comment, themslvh.Thanks for the comment, themslvh.Ravenblackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07408808375869234480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-1552232797797987572011-08-06T09:40:00.141+08:002011-08-06T09:40:00.141+08:00Really enjoyed the format and loved the last lines...Really enjoyed the format and loved the last lines. Great writting!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-40706929789134589182011-08-05T17:46:47.009+08:002011-08-05T17:46:47.009+08:00Melle: thanks for your feedback. :)
thrivewithra ...Melle: thanks for your feedback. :)<br /><br />thrivewithra and Chelsea: thanks for your comments.<br /><br />yummycheffarley: I too am fascinated sometimes by how shape and spaces might affect reading, adding to the experience of the matter being written about. I often try to do that.<br /><br /><br />I don't think I'll do anything like this ever again. I think I've gone a little too far. lol :)Ravenblackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07408808375869234480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-53818920075468939692011-08-05T16:13:09.720+08:002011-08-05T16:13:09.720+08:00I often write a poem and look back on it as a visu...I often write a poem and look back on it as a visual shape and am surprised by its appearance...I might try to 'shape' it first to see what happens! what a wonderful technique. =)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-72893353447764186782011-08-05T15:54:46.144+08:002011-08-05T15:54:46.144+08:00Very creative formatting, cool effect.
Nicely don...Very creative formatting, cool effect.<br /><br />Nicely done.Chelsea Betshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13418083319226452695noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-49228980096082539872011-08-05T12:47:45.552+08:002011-08-05T12:47:45.552+08:00Creative presentation concept!Creative presentation concept!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-18480755552001536122011-08-05T04:03:05.572+08:002011-08-05T04:03:05.572+08:00I am interested in how the breaks you have created...I am interested in how the breaks you have created have crafted a sort of swerving motion throughout the poem, like a car skidding back and forth. Interesting. The story is well - presented and compelling.Mellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15247137831515066254noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-14492515452123517822011-08-03T12:03:05.932+08:002011-08-03T12:03:05.932+08:00:D
Thanks for the visit and thanks for sharing yo...:D<br /><br />Thanks for the visit and thanks for sharing your story, chromapoesy. :)Ravenblackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07408808375869234480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-73399575618502232342011-08-02T23:32:57.553+08:002011-08-02T23:32:57.553+08:00I'm sorry I missed this in the Rally, I enjoye...I'm sorry I missed this in the Rally, I enjoyed your spaces and the halting phrases. It reminded me of the first time my husband drove an automatic. It was our first wedding anniversary and he jolted me so many times in one block I made him get out and let me drive. You picked a rich metaphor, well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-50342700493654837592011-08-02T08:55:58.827+08:002011-08-02T08:55:58.827+08:00Thanks for the comment, bendedspoon. :)Thanks for the comment, bendedspoon. :)Ravenblackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07408808375869234480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-46256809880538589282011-08-01T20:16:49.334+08:002011-08-01T20:16:49.334+08:00What an interesting journey through your poem! Coo...What an interesting journey through your poem! Cool :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-24905150211446446912011-08-01T07:31:02.620+08:002011-08-01T07:31:02.620+08:00Thank you for visit and nice comment, scatterednon...Thank you for visit and nice comment, scatterednonsense.Ravenblackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07408808375869234480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-71235014921795534532011-08-01T01:02:58.425+08:002011-08-01T01:02:58.425+08:00i love how your broken sentences add to your power...i love how your broken sentences add to your powerful poem, very well said and very well presented, great stuffAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-8515766862675350162011-07-31T10:58:32.193+08:002011-07-31T10:58:32.193+08:00cusemymetalbody and lonelyrecluse: thank you for y...cusemymetalbody and lonelyrecluse: thank you for your comments! :)Ravenblackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07408808375869234480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-52742284202889132022011-07-31T05:40:15.136+08:002011-07-31T05:40:15.136+08:00Great poem this, love the use of both the metaphor...Great poem this, love the use of both the metaphorical road and the literal journey, very well combined.<br />The Lonely Recluse.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-48314015889249848002011-07-30T23:40:48.481+08:002011-07-30T23:40:48.481+08:00I really like the construction of this poem, it...I really like the construction of this poem, it's not something that is done often, but you did it very well. I enjoyed the little story that went with it, and the spaces really helped to emphasize a thought of an emotion. Great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-75333307775838417382011-07-30T20:12:46.808+08:002011-07-30T20:12:46.808+08:00Elaine: I tend to hold on to old feelings sometime...Elaine: I tend to hold on to old feelings sometimes even though things have moved on I guess. I want friends for life but it cannot always be like that as things and people and goals change. Thanks for your comment. <br /><br />Brian: Appreciated your thoughts on this. Thank you. <br /><br />jennifaye and mindlovemisery -- thanks for coming by and leaving comments also. :)Ravenblackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07408808375869234480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-19115902785485281452011-07-30T18:01:47.529+08:002011-07-30T18:01:47.529+08:00I love the form it's really powerful, heart-br...I love the form it's really powerful, heart-breaking and beautifully writtenAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-771336311780971082011-07-30T11:29:35.678+08:002011-07-30T11:29:35.678+08:00I agree with cindyeksuzian. The construction and b...I agree with cindyeksuzian. The construction and broken rhythm is interesting. Very nice.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-2848693361462965272011-07-30T11:27:11.764+08:002011-07-30T11:27:11.764+08:00nice...visually appealing...cant make out what the...nice...visually appealing...cant make out what the voids are supposed to make but it gives a cool eefect that play off the title and closing line...as for the verse, it is well spun...very nice ravenblack...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-12971530829303781512011-07-30T11:21:32.029+08:002011-07-30T11:21:32.029+08:00An inventive way to look at the path of a relation...An inventive way to look at the path of a relationship. I think you are good with themes of relationship and partings in the modern world, judging from this and your week 47 entry, "Parting Ways." <br /><br />Thank you, by the way, for the Week 48 nomination.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-64316785598467710872011-07-30T11:04:29.588+08:002011-07-30T11:04:29.588+08:00Thanks for the comment, Genebrother. :)Thanks for the comment, Genebrother. :)Ravenblackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07408808375869234480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-11484408885816348732011-07-30T09:38:55.203+08:002011-07-30T09:38:55.203+08:00I enjoyed the commitment and what lay between.
Gen...I enjoyed the commitment and what lay between.<br />GenebrotherAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-14348876779448020592011-07-30T06:39:07.562+08:002011-07-30T06:39:07.562+08:00Alcina, dsnake, booguloo and mindsinger: thanks fo...Alcina, dsnake, booguloo and mindsinger: thanks for your wonderful comments and feedback on my piece. <br /><br />dsnake: it initially looked like a giant block of text which was rather monotonous to read, so I thought I play around with the space to see what effect it will have on the reading. I have to admit I was a bit unsure if it might be too gimmicky. <br /><br />Thank goodness the weekend is here. :) I can now take time to visit you all in return.Ravenblackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07408808375869234480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5462814069356368476.post-52186424642692159362011-07-30T01:56:30.649+08:002011-07-30T01:56:30.649+08:00The road of love is indeed rocky; especially if on...The road of love is indeed rocky; especially if only two are involved in the journey. The form was captivating.mindsingerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02090555842872637085noreply@blogger.com