Sunday, April 12, 2015

Daydreaming while in the stairwell


Daydreaming while in the stairwell

The cadences of shadows cast by mountains
from a distance, the humid air of a hot day
wetting the roof of one's lips; taste

the phantom waterfalls, hear the waters
hit the rocks below, splitting
into a thousand rainbows over a cave.

Emerge, one leg one foot over a log,
one hand over a rock, another hand
taking root. Emerge again water-bearer,

breaking away from the chasers, leave
them behind with the chained up bicycle,
the shoes left out to dry, the plants

dying from a drought; this is concrete,
concrete and you can get out anytime, just
walk through the exit door back inside

where a smart lift waits to be summoned;
a dollar Macdonald's ice cream cone
would be so good that it caused a pause.


Watch those lunch-packers walk away,
don't raise your arms to call them back,
take another breath for the next step.


This was written in response to a prompt on "Imaginary Garden with Real Toads" blog for Sunday mini-challenge -- a poem attempting the style of Wallace Stevens or using one of his titles, or lines from his poem.


Grace said...

That was a wonderful daydream on mountain & waterfalls until I came to a lift, for dollar ice cream cone at Macdonald - smiles ~

This sounds like me, walk, breathe & daydream again ~

Thanks for linking up with Real Toads and wishing you Happy Sundat ~

Ravenblack said...

This was really fun to do. Thanks Grace. :)

Sanaa Rizvi said...

Intriguing! Like walking in a dream... love the rich language and style :D
Its beautiful..!! :D

Kerry O'Connor said...

This is a wonderful piece of poetry, perhaps informed by Stevens' style but freshly imagined for our own times. I like the way you have expressed the escape into wild land, away from the malls and take away meals. And I especially commend the 'emerge' stanza and the one thereafter. Excellent work.

Gillena Cox said...

a fun write , i enjoyed te backwad entrance through the exit

have a nice Sunday

much love...

Björn Rudberg said...

Wonderful response.. I love the way you tied the dream to the concrete.. of wandering those paths...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

A wonderful read, and I, too, especially noted the Emerge stanza. A really good read.

Sumana Roy said...

a beautiful poem...that bit of reality in between day dream is a little hard:) however there's always the backward entrance through the exit :)

Susie Clevenger said...

I felt like I was in the daydream with you..such vivid images. Beautiful

grapeling said...

tangible; memorable ~

Ravenblack said...

Thank you all for your comments and response. :)

Wolfsrosebud said...

loved the minute by minute feel to these lines

Ravenblack said...

Wolfsrosebud: thank you.