Sunday, August 19, 2012



All that noise

Saturday morning, awake before the heat,

before the first six o'clock bus rolls by,
a rattling iron can of metal parts,
before the whistle of boiling kettles
and clatter of pot covers.

Rest in the silence

                that stays its hand on the land,
the quiet of trees remembering the swamp
and the song of crickets
in the reeds that accompany a new river.

Listen. How almost together, we wake
and break the day,
                 our buzz beating to life.

Reverberating vibrations
from our machinery:

                knocking, banging,
                       humming, roaring,
   penetrating bones and stones.



Fred Rutherford said...

Raven. Love the sensory here. Primarily the auditory, but even so, almost all of your choices can carry numerous sensorial uses. Love how the visual elements come to be and the tactile really impressed me. Strong write. Excellent read. Thanks

Daydreamertoo said...

Isn't it a wonderful time, that you get to have the 'almost' silence before the rest of the world awakens to continue making the everyday noises. I like to get up at least an hour before my teen so that I get that 'peace' before the chaos of day begins.
Really enjoyed this walk with you and, thank you so much for such a lovely comment on my post today.
Thankfully, was never in an abusive relationship (as an adult) but, I feel so for women, and sometimes men, who are. I appreciate your taking time to really comment. :)

Brian Miller said...

smiles..a cool waking...gentle...well except for the clanging and all the sounds in this feels like just laying there taking it in...

Ravenblack said...

Thanks Fred and Daydreamer.

Playing with sound, which is primarily what I notice.

I tend to wake before dawn, and I do enjoy that most quiet hour before the city comes to life. :)

Daydreamer: always a pleasure to read your poems. That was a really good one. I do feel strongly about this subject as well.

Ravenblack said...

Hi Brian, thanks for your visit. It does get all noisy very quickly once alarm clocks go off. The weekends just a bit more delayed. :D

nene said...

Some noise more distracting than others depending on geography or demography but these awakening noises disappear all too soon.

Gracias mi amigo for this noise of awareness

Ravenblack said...

Yes. Thank you, Nene. :)

Brian Miller said...

hope you have a great week...smiles.

Ravenblack said...

Right back at ya, Brian. :)

Bodhirose said...

Pretty quiet here in my neighborhood...loud noises can really make me jumpy. Mostly it's peaceful...except for the clatter going on in my head! :)

Ravenblack said...

My neighborhood, well we are all too close together for any quiet. :D

Anonymous said...

This is just lovely - the genuine sounds of the urban scene, and then the sounds of the more intimate body's scene - very well done - the hand of silence staying over the land is an especially cool phrase - kind of a reversal here - really interesting. k.

Ravenblack said...

Thanks Karin. :)