SloppyI do not rememberthis buttonon this shirtbeing this white,the stitchingbeing this tight;it's not the sameas the reston this shirt:all the others hangloose, comfortablewhere they are hooked;but this one,number twofrom the bottom,this one is different:the stitches are too clean,too tight,over-sewn --this one is new.
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Posted for dVerse Poetics: Button, Button.
34 comments:
you feel every word
Cool. Thanks Chris.
Nice use of the button to describe a person or an event ~
Who was being sloppy, now :-)
which leads me to wonder just what happened that the button needed to be replaced....there is a story there surely...and it makes for a interesting allusion to other things as well...
Oh, now there's another memory jogged in my old brain. I've sewed a few buttons on in my time, and who'd have thought you could sew one on too tight. I think I learned that lesson first time out. I could hardly get the button hole around the button!
Was there ANY LIPSTICK ON HIS COLLAR maybe :-)
Fun and terse and enigmatic write.
This reply is for Charles:
Next time you sew on a button: put two matchsticks in between the button and the shirt, to remove later and give it some slack.
[That's what I taught my husband :-)]
Ahh ha... so.. the question must be then.. who is the person who sewed it on for him?
This is fabulous writing because it's so concise, and leads directly to the subject of 'who'
A great read :)
ugh...that leaves the mind wandering what may happened...and in direction of another woman maybe..
Very tightly written. You've sown questions that lead one to ask about why the button obsesses the speaker. Buttons often hold secrets as much as they reveal, it seems.
that first moment when you realize that things have changed and will never be the same again...
A mystery here - subtle - Sherlockian! Human too. k.
Thanks for the awesome responses, everyone. Much appreciated. :)
I do love the mystery in this poem! You could write a sequel, which would be fun to read.
A really tight write, and possibly some hidden meanings in there too, great stuff!
Conscientiousness tells fascinating stories, as does its lack. I enjoyed pondering the who and why here. Thank you!
a hint of mystery here, I think, the lines of the poem gathering evidence as if through a detective's lens - really well done!
Simply a button or metaphor for a person...there are so many questions. Who did sew on the button? or I have been comfortable with those around me..who is this that stirs my regulated life? Love it!!
I LOVE this poem - that is exactly how foreign a newly sewn on button feels to the fingers. Great write.
The simplest things awry catch our attention. You magnified a situation for us here and made us all into wannabe detectives. Very deft and clever write.
recognisable
Thanks to each of you. :) I'm glad the poem worked out and that the mystery I attempted came across.
I took it as metaphorical. How we brace against change. The different thing, the new person, the replacement part is never quickly warmed up to. We like what we know. I often feel like that new button.
tight writing...pinning down the button... unravelling my imagination
Dark Angel and Becky, thank you for your comments.
@Dark Angel -- thanks for sharing your take on this. I agree, we like we know; it takes a while to accept something new, or a change.
Aha! Time for an investigation, obviously! A perfect little poem.
This says a whole lot... great piece!
Very nice. Great use of button as metaphor here. The way you detail the others hanging loose, and the other one being too uptight. Very cool depiction here
sometimes when i sew a button on, i do it too tight, i like your tern "oversewn"
Okay, so WHAT happened? I'm guessing some one tried to cover up a tryst? :) The case of the olde new button. :)
Great little poem!
xoox
Dave, Laurie, Fred, Tammy, Jannie, thank you!
Oversewn -- logophilia exercise left over...*g*
Lovely poem.
Lovely work. You're making us all think!
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Thanks Madeleine and Ami! :)
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