Saturday, April 7, 2012

NaPoWriMo #7: Spied a private moment


By the minutes

I saw a woman
wipe away
her tears

before they could
run trails
down her face

as she stands
by the street

             cigarette stains
             where the men
             wait, out
             of the way
             of flowing

as she talks
to her boy
             on the phone

a million miles away,
or on another planet,

in another time,
most certainly,
in another place;

trivial matters
of child chatter
into precious things
                      to share


she is here

and he is there
and 10 minutes
is all they have.



nene said...

Somehow we must all connect no matter how and where we're at

Daydreamertoo said...

Lovely. Maybe it was a clandestine meeting and they were secret lovers.
Great moment captured by you.

dsnake1 said...

a moment nicely captured.

yeah, i guessed the woman wants to stay connected. it's reassuring.

Ravenblack said...

nene, Daydreamer, dsnake: Thanks for the visit, and hope you all are having a great weekend. :)

Anonymous said...

Wonderful. K .

CygnetSeven said...

Reminds me of the song Five Years by David Bowie. Thanks!

CygnetSeven said...

"cigarette stains
where the men

My favorite part, channeling cummings! =)
Too sweet!

Fred Rutherford said...

Great observation here. Trivial matter amplifying, great line. Cool title as well. Thanks

Anonymous said...

This one was quite emotional for me but it may be my frame of mind. I love how you are able to tell us so much about them in so little time.

Ravenblack said...

Thanks for comments, friends.

I did try to think of a story, but decided that me trying to imagine a bit more backstory of this scene might be overdoing it. Glad it works for you all.

aprille said...

Nicely observed and presented.

Ravenblack said...

Thanks Aprille. Appreciated your visit and comments.