Sunday, April 29, 2012

NaPoWriMo #29: Weeding


Roots reaching deep, deeper;

dropped in by a bird
or rode in on the wind,

choking on the greens you worked so hard to cultivate.

They are as green, greener;

some with small flowers
purple, white and yellow;
spots of beauty amongst
a crisscross of shoots
and creepers.

Some of them have fruits
edible as snacks,
or bitter, poisonous

all to be pulled and dumped on the compose heap

Growing wild, wilder;

a weed is only a weed
in the land of tamed crops.

Not very happy with this. I have a terrible headache because it's so hot today. Global warming -- I'm feeling it if that is what it is.


Pat Hatt said...

Wasn't a bad one, I would rather be the weed then be some tamed crop, as long as I didn't get thrown in the compose heap..haha

dsnake1 said...

this is a decent work, in my opinion. very readable.
you are right, there is still colour (beauty?) in their nondescript lives. and they will probably outlive a lot of other plants.

hope you're feeling better. i am still running with the flu. :)

Fred Rutherford said...

Raven, this is good. I get that way all the time, when you write something and have something else preoccupying the mind, in here you have a headache, so I think these other influences taint our own opinions. Anyhow, I enjoyed the piece, especially the last lines and the some with small flowers and some of them have fruit stanzas, really like how those two read. Thanks

Ravenblack said...

Thanks guys, I hope to make the last one today a good one.

Ravenblack said...

dsnake: I hope you get over your flu soon!

Anonymous said...

I'm sorry to hear about your headache and especially your lost wallet, how stressful. I hope this finds you feeling better. Only one day left for NaPoWriMo, you can do it!

Ravenblack said...

Thanks Anna. I'm better in terms of mood. Good news came after lunch that my wallet has been found. Of course the cash is gone, but well at least I get my ID card back. That's the only thing I was concern about.

Anonymous said...

So glad to hear it :).

Heaven said...

The April challenge is almost over and I hope you are feeling better.

Weeds are weeds to me. Sometimes they look beautiful just growing about themselves. But not beside my flowers :-)

Ravenblack said...


Thanks Grace.

Raven said...

Well, it is a bit back ... so I surely hope that the headache is long gone. Yes, global warming ... what we are doing is grotesque. But do not be unhappy with this poem ... for it is about weeds ... and thus seems appropriate ... good.

Ravenblack said...

The headache is gone but it does come especially when the weather is very hot and humid. Thanks for your comment on this one, Raven. :)