Thursday, September 8, 2011

It's ok, you're old enough...

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Moving past a season

A teddy bear toy
hangs on a nail;

summer is going out
with the wind and rain,

soft toy damp to touch
sags, stitches
that made a smile
wanes, button eyes
lose their shine.

A boy put into bed
after being told
he is old enough,

eyes stay wide
under the covers
but only for a night.


Inspired by HVP's photo "Lost and Found".

Posted to Poetry Pantry #66 on  Poets United

16 comments:

Old Raven said...

There is a gentle sweetness and tenderness here that is a joy to encounter. Thank you.

Ravenblack said...

Glad you like it, Old Raven. :)

Brian Miller said...

evocative...to me it was like a horror movie...the teddy bear on the nail...boy sent to bed without him as he is old enough now...i can feel the boys aloneness nice write...

Ravenblack said...

Thanks for feedback, Brian. Really appreciate it.

I did want to capture that sadness of losing a toy -- I remember the ache of it but then getting over it too.

Fred said...

Age is an interesting idea, never quite understood despite the "age". The middle stanza is really great. Excellent write

Ravenblack said...

Thanks Fred.

Age is some kind of basis for certain kinds of assumptions...

California Ink in Motion said...

Sad for the boy, did he think he was old enough? Perhaps he was 22 and it was time:) Very sweet and brings back memories. Nice write.

nadirafromkannur said...

Our attachments start early, don't they and so too the pangs of separation:-)

Karen said...

You certainly did capture the forlorn feeling of both the bear and the boy. Nice connection to summer's end.

shawnacymariekiker said...

this had such a velveteen rabbit feel to it. the poignant moments of growing up are felt by both the boy and the bear i;m sure.

Ravenblack said...

California Ink in Motion, Nadira, Karen and shawnacymariekiker: thanks for visiting and for leaving your thoughtful comments.


(California Ink in Motion: lol. )

Jo Bryant said...

a very poignant and forlorn picture you have drawn

Jinksy said...

Ah! I don't think anyone is aver too old for ted! lol

Ravenblack said...

Jo: Thanks for reading and commenting. Appreciate it. :)

Jinksy: :D

eclipsingwinter said...

Oh, how sad but it happens to every kid that has a security blanket. Well written with succinct lines to allow the reader to fit their memories into the scene.

Beth

Ravenblack said...

Thanks Beth.