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I think we need a new ladder
hear that rattle, I think
something is loose,
a screw
that needs tightening
get the screwdriver
out of the toolbox
under the leaky
kitchen sink?
not rusted, is it?
the screw or the
screwdriver?
it's just a screw
-- see it
remember the stool
you said you could fix?
just a nail, you said
and a weak leg,
don't forget it
was the leg that broke
when grandma sat,
grandma broke
her hip
and there, see
feel it, it's done
screwed tight
no more rattling
not even a creak
step on it, try
not using it
and not arguing
getting a new one
over a screw.
(Inspired by HVP's photo "Broken Ladder")
Submitted for Poetry Potluck Monday Week 44
21 comments:
this is so great. i'm so glad i got to find your blog through the poetry potluck. thanks for this!
the way you proceed and deliver your message is brilliant,
agreed, well done piece.
Happy Potluck.
This is so true to life, we put off doing things and then when we really need something fixing, someone can get hurt.
Soul Speak
Love this piece... so typical, but those repairs we make seem so logical until that weak leg shines through.
So glad you stopped by my place. I am fascinated by your words... will be following along.
Interesting post... I liked the way you have created this one...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/07/whispers-memories-to-live-by.html
How typical. My wife would tell you that I treat the jobs around the house the same way :)
Marit, Jingle, Daydreamertoo, Reflections and Shashi, PhotoDiction, thanks for taking the time to read my poem and for commenting.
PhotoDiction: :D
Brillian, I loved it :)
I love the conversational tone while remaining in poetic rhythm. I've always liked ladders and I like this poem too.
cute. enjoyed it
Getting jobs done is not easy and that applies to so many circumstances of life... Really nice!
:) This made me smile. I think many people can relate to this kind of thing - very nice slice of life piece!
Jeanie, wordpowersound, lunawitch, seabell and dragonkatet, thank you for your wonderful comments, really appreciate it. :)
So true, I have to say I am guilty of putting something off till it's reached critical proportions. Wonderful poem
Thank you, mindlovemisery.
:D
i like the conversational tone of this work.
very appropriate , for a mundane piece of job like, fixing a ladder? :)
enjoyed the read., thanks!
Thanks coming by, dsnake. I find lately that I'm better off writing about the mundane, beautiful things are already well spoken for or already speak for themselves. Feels like I can't match them or do them over better in words.
Love the conversational tone of this and the link to the screw in grandma's hip. Your poetry is great. How can I subscribe to your blog?
wordcoaster: I just added a subscription tab on the right sidebar. I thought there was one at the bottom of the page but I'm not exactly sure if that is it. Thanks for the interest. :)
I like this one of yours. It's like, darned if we don't do the same thing over and over again, and it gets us to the same place over and over again!
Brilliant metaphor with fixing hardware in poetic form.
Very cool.
Thanks Cindy. :)
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